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[imaginary]

Zany, if you really wanna succeed don't listen to Ali

[Abdullah1441]

Zany, if you really wanna succeed don't listen to Ali

Unfortunately, that statement is true to some extent... *Looks at PR list*

[imaginary]

Unfortunately, that statement is true to some extent... *Looks at PR list*

Dw you won't become one which is why I love the US PR Team

[Abdullah1441]

Dw you won't become one which is why I love the US PR Team

Hey Marg, go back to the topic at hand, Zany's story

[Zany]

Zany, you should really describe the characters in your story, mainly your character. You don't describe how you look in either of the stories.

Example on how you should​ describe yourself in the story (btw I'm describing your Graalian in Era, you know, the one I spam):

"I was a teen, 13 to be exact. I had gray hair that went down to my waist and dark black eyes. I usually wore a cap that had a blue Z on it, but I didn't wear it today, etc." (You probably get my point by now)

Planning to add more detail and be more descriptive in general on my main copy; not editing this one on big things like that. But thanks for your input, I did notice the lack of description and feeling in the setting. I don't want to be too blunt about describing the main character, just because it sounds forced and unrealistic but I'll find an authentic way to make it happen, because I agree it would be better for imagery.

[Abdullah1441]

Make sure there's a brown tabby Maine Coon in the story, Zany

[N!chola$]

Make sure there's a brown tabby Maine Coon in the story, Zany

Don't do it Zany, he's trying to lure you in so he can pounce on you like cats do to their prey.

[GTA Tetris]

Nice story (:...

[imaginary]

Isn't she so cool

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I can see her becoming the next Jake Paul with the Disney channel flow

[GTA Tetris]

Isn't she so cool

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I can see her becoming the next Jake Paul with the Disney channel flow

Yea not disney....