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    Post My son is a fidget spinner

    Hello I'm Carrie and this is my strange addiction. I am addicted to avocados and fidget spinners.
    "Mom.. do I need to wear this stupid shirt?" My son asks me.
    "Yes," I reply. The shirt contains two avocados saying "AVO' MARRY XMAS!" Even though it's not Christmas.
    Last Christmas all my son got was fifty six fidget spinners and a four pack of avocados. He's the most spoiled little brat in the world ill tell ya that right here and right now. He always complains that all he ever sees is avocado but I don't really care. He needs to respect what I give him. I mean hey, his father is an avocado.

    "CUT!" The man screamed. "I'm sorry but this is just too weird. I know we're good at doing this but this is just to much.. sorry," he said, not sounding sorry at all actually.
    "Oh.. ok.. I guess ill just go then I guess..." I said, me and my son walking out of the filming studio.


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    Is your son ali gamer ?

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    Quote Originally Posted by imaginary View Post
    Is your son ali gamer ?
    xD no. My brother said he wanted to be a fidget spinner so I just made this up in negative 2 minutes tbh.
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    I'm so confused, it could have been better. The reader has a misconception during the beginning of the story because it is being narrated, yet it isn't in full quotation marks.
    It could have been better.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Kendrick View Post
    I'm so confused, it could have been better. The reader has a misconception during the beginning of the story because it is being narrated, yet it isn't in full quotation marks.
    It could have been better.
    There don't need to be any quotations there, actually.

    Some other grammatical errors, maybe, but I don't think it's that serious.
    "'An old friend of ours dared me to try and play God...' Mak craned his neck, the advisors and guardsmen in his wake suddenly alert at their charge's blatant discontent.

    He stood with a confidence we had never known him to possess, the bright orange trim of his ivory sleeves dangling so far from the scrawny arms folded behind his back that we thought the robe adorning his body might blow away completely in the winds that whipped around us.

    'Little did they know I was born for the role.'"

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    this story made me cry respect

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    You should revise it and make it better and send it into era news!!

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    Quote Originally Posted by imaginary View Post
    Is your son ali gamer ?
    Formerly known as "AliGamer911".

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    Quote Originally Posted by AliGamer911 View Post


    Wow that almost made me smile

    You want breakfast? You gotta catch it!

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    Quote Originally Posted by MJ4 View Post
    Wow that almost made me smile
    almost


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