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    Please rate my Prologue!

    nothing to see here lel




    EDIT: There may be grammar errors, this story is still under editing so I may need to proof read again.
    Last edited by Rima Wasabi; 08-05-2021 at 07:55 PM.

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    Woah that was only the prolouge... I really like the story. Although one thing to note is that you over use commas (,). Some of them should be replaced with periods (.)


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