The End (Beta)

[Rima Wasabi]

Thanks Kendrick
Btw I was adding real places like California and Canada so the reader could have a connection with the story (the reader could go "Oh! I've been to Canada!" Or "Hey! I live in California!")

I see what you're doing there, which would be great since you want the readers to connect but there are many other ways to do so than just using city places. It can be something as small as "this person doesn't like tomato" and that would click with the audience. It is not that it is confusing, it could be cute to combine both worlds together (I mean, why not? people add vampires to the real world).

I also agree with the transitions, they are very important for a smooth read.